Research and Planning: Script

We decided to keep our script short due to the fact that in our test shoot we had a large amount of dialogue and it didn't sound natural. Therefore we only had 4 lines of dialogue:

Lara: I think we should break up

Michael: What?

Lara: We can still be friends though, right?

Michael: Umm, yeah yeah okay then...

We thought it would be much easier to convey the awkwardness of the situation with a long silence than to have conversation that sounded forced and unnatural. Out old script from the test shoot had about 30 lines of dialogue. We feel that our new sequence is a lot better and one of the reasons for this is the reduced amount of dialogue.

Representation: Costumes

There are only two characters in our opening and the setting is very normal so our costumes are not complicated. Michael will be wearing a white polo shirt with a stripy jumper. He will also be wearing jeans with a black belt and brown shoes. Finally, he will have a schoolbag slung over one shoulder as the he is walking back from college.

Lara is wearing black jeans, white converse, a plain t-shirt and a parka. She will also have a bag on her back. She will be wearing earrings and will have makeup on and have her nails painted.
Both of these costumes are fairly typical of teenagers. They are also not particularly attention-grabbing or interesting as they are not the focus of the scene.

 

Fairly simple outfits with schoolbags - 21 Jump Street

Animatic Reflections

Our reflections

• There was a lack of variation of shots in the second half.
• We could have used more camera movement in the second half.
• To avoid having one actor being the voice for two characters, we could have done with more voice actors.
• The soundtrack could be more interesting and individual/unique as it is quite generic.
• More snappy, concise dialogue to make it more interesting.
  

Teacher feedback

• The story is fine and makes sense.
• More shot diversity and movement is needed.
• Lacking institutional conventions such as production and distribution logos at the start.
• The titles should continue appearing through the conversation.

Treatment - Our Sequence's Visual Style

Our titles will be integrated into shot. Our influences and examples are - Panic Room, Moon and Zombieland

Style

Influence by and in the style of Edgar Wright, Director of Scott Pilgrim vs The World and 3 Flavours Cornetto Trilogy. He is known for his:

-Fast, action-style editing (usually of casual tasks)

-Whip pans

-Crash zooms

-He also uses repeated lines or snippets of dialogue  and awkward humour in fast paced moments

-Fast-paced, upbeat mood

        Our sequence will look like an opening sequence because of the titles and because of all the characters and themes being introduced.